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AI essay feedback example — persuasive writing (teacher draft report)

High school English · Unit 4 · Fictional Year 10 essay · quote-anchored deductions · teacher sign-off pending

Public sample AI essay feedback report with criterion-level marks, manuscript quotes for each deduction, and teacher sign-off — not generic AI grader copy.

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Persuasive essay — Student A (anonymized demo)

MARKING REPORT · DRAFT · Year 10 English · Term 2 persuasive batch

Total score

31 / 40 · 78%

Summary feedback

A clear argument with solid structure. Strengthen evidence integration with sourced quotes and tighten the conclusion so it restates the thesis without new ideas.

Strengths

Verified in manuscript — teacher can approve or edit.

Criterion-level feedback

8 / 10 Thesis and argument

Thesis is explicit and mostly sustained. Paragraph 3 drifts from the central claim.

Quote-anchored deduction: −2 · Body paragraph does not support the main thesis.

Manuscript quote“However, many people still disagree about this issue.”Paragraph 3
7 / 10 Evidence and analysis

Uses one strong statistic but analysis of how it supports the claim is thin.

Quote-anchored deduction: −3 · Limited explanation of how evidence supports the claim.

Manuscript quote“Recycling rates have improved in many cities across the country.”Page 2 · no source cited
9 / 10 Structure and cohesion

Introduction, body, and conclusion are well signposted with effective transitions.

7 / 10 Language and mechanics

Generally fluent formal tone; several comma splices reduce clarity.

Quote-anchored deduction: −3 · Repeated comma splices.

Manuscript quote“Phones are useful, they help students research, this is important.”Paragraph 4